SOS:
1. Use technical language
2. Use a variety of descriptive language
3. Use direct speech
4. past tense
5. in logical order.
Double backflip, 360 tail whip !
" guys guys "
shouted a guy in a rabbit-toes bucket hat. "my name is Jimi"
"wait you mean"...
"yep , im Jimi Quench. I'm here because the nazi's are executing any tourist in japan . And we need you now ". "sure cuz " pops up Levi.
When they arrived at the airport there was a private jet with a stair case. There was free wifi, biscuits and televisions . Ryan was making the most of the free wifi and uploading his latest video . While Levi was making his KTM into a death-machine.
They arrived with a welcoming blast of shrapnel. With levi on his KTM and ryan holding a Ak-47 , the nazi's were slowly dieing down when R.Willy got shot and needed cpr . levi managed to keep hi alive all the way to the hospital. They didn't think the poor fella would pull through. But slowly he recovered . The cops handled the rest of the nazi's , while the two heroes returned home only to get knighted by the queen for there braveness, for saving over 100 tourist and all the hard work they had pulled off.
good story
ReplyDeleteI like how you used a large variety of punctuation
ReplyDeleteI like how you used descriptive words
Next time use paragraphs
:)
good language
ReplyDeletecool topic
next time use paragraphs
good to see lg and sos
ReplyDeletecool story
next time use paragraphs
good language
ReplyDeletecreative topic
use paragraphs