Wednesday, August 16, 2017

  Descriptive writing





The 6.5 foot tall “luke hobbs” is as strong as terminator . with his police badge on his belt and his muscles blowing up like balloons he frowns .


He has a combat pistol , his eyes are darker than dirt . he is wearing shades of black including cargo pants and an under armour t-shirt . He has dealt with the most dangerous criminals in the world.

4 comments:

  1. good character description
    good punctuation
    next time put in your lg and sos

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  2. great description
    good paragraphing
    put your LG and SOS
    😃👍😎

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  3. Good description.
    Good use of punctuation.
    Next step - Put in your LG and SOS. So people know what to base your comments on.

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  4. good description
    being prises
    more body

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